Like with your other story, I thought it'd be better to give an overall review on the last one. All in all, I really enjoyed the story, as well as all the illustrations that went with it. I think you did a great job, and although 91 is a good score, I'd have given it a higher score if I had to grade it.

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Yeah that's ok.^-^Aww thank you very much!I think most of those points taken off were for neatness.^-^

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You're welcome. At least your teacher graded fairly... I think that if I ever became a teacher, I'd be too lenient on the grades.

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Heh yeah she's pretty good at being fair.I think you'd be a good teacher

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Aww, thank you, but I can't stand in front of a group of ppl to talk about anything; I get way too nervous. I've been told that I seem confident and etc, but inside I'm shaking like a leaf, and I feel a little dizzy. I don't know why, though... I guess it's cause I'm thinking of all those eyes looking at me, and I can't stand being the center of attention. I have actually thought about being an English teacher, maybe on the college level, but I really don't think I "have what it takes", so to speak.

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it' funny

You're welcome!Heh I get nervous, but it's usually when I'm in front of people I don't know or when I have to do something in Theatre.I look confident, but if you actually notice you'll see me do something to keep me on tack and not running out of class.There was a time earlier in my english class my teach said we could read our hero paper and the last time I did something like that in 9th grade I couldn't finish reading it I started crying during it.And so my friend said she'd do it if I did it and that she would stand next to me during it.And so I took my teach's chair and I noticed my leg started to shake violently and I got through it with out crying, but when I sat down at my seat and my other friend read her's I started to cry a little.See only 3 of us went up; me, and my two other friends; and all of us had sad ones.So we were crying and our teacher was crying too.

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Aww thank you very much!^-^

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Awwwwww!! >.< Cute and sad!!

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